When I arrive home from school it’s a bitter sweet moment when I realise that although my learning was finished, my work has just begun. I look down at my arm and try to decode the scribbles I had written on my arm earlier that day, I take my back pack up the stairs and into my working place, also known as the kitchen table. I look once more at the ink upon my arm and decide I need a ‘break’ from work for a while. I set a time usually to about one hour later, it is during this time that I answer the tedious questions my mother asks me such as “how was school”, and my personal favourite “did you learn anything new?” But I can’t give her to much of a hard time because she does mean well. After the answering of the questions water and miscellaneous food items are ingested. After that I take my ‘brain’ break, and do some mindless activity until my alarm rings. Then I spend the next half an hour ‘preparing’ my work place. After I am satisfied with the layout of my work I start to wonder “hmmm is there anything new on Facebook?” Then I spend the next 40 Min's to hour updating the most pointless needless things ever created. Only after the approximately two and a half hours of pre homework do things start to get done. Now my homework has been started but finishing it is a whole new “how too”. If anything would alert people to my procrastination habits this would be it.
Robert Nice
I do this all the time!
ReplyDelete"After the answering of the questions water and miscellaneous food items are ingested. After that I take my ‘brain’ break, and do some mindless activity until my alarm rings."
maybe use a word other than "after" to start one of the sentences.
I really liked it though. Very nice!
thank you i will defenatly take that into consideration. thats one of the things i have trouble with.
ReplyDeleteI was looking forward to the "How To Scar Someone" rant :P
ReplyDeleteSpeaking of which your title should be al capitalized.
"whole new “how too”" should be "how to".
Realize is spelt "realize"
"I look down at my arm and try to decode the scribbles I had written on my arm earlier that day, I take my back pack up the stairs and into my working place, also known as the kitchen table. " Arm is too close twice in this sentence. Maybe say: "I look down at my arm and try to decode the scribbles I had written there earlier that day..."
All just suggestions. Nothing is "wrong" but I have to say something when I read it.
Very creative Bobby.
thank you ziven, and i though i was using "too" corectly this time. and i'm kinda sad i missed the repetitive arm, i was really trying not to do that this time.
ReplyDeleteYour welcome.
ReplyDeleteZiven is a proper noun.
All sentences start with capitals. You did it twice but I'll only say it once: I is always capitalized.